Performance Story and description

I enjoyed class on Thursday because we got to practice for the performance story. At first I couldn't find anyone interesting to write about, but as I sat in Starbucks in Slane, I noticed some pretty interesting people. I wrote about a few different students in line for coffee until I noticed the person who was most interesting. The cleaning lady was mopping the floors and seemed like she was in her own world. Her appearance was interesting and I think I painted a picture for the reader.

I was disappointed in my grade for my article about Avon and thought I was adding enough description until I really thought about it and about the next assignment. I am becoming more aware of how important description is and hope to become a better writer and for my articles to improve.

Peer Editing and Performance Article

I really liked Bryan Rothamel's idea for us to edit each others articles before we turn them in. Critiquing the articles in class on the big screen was helpful, but it was sometimes difficult because I hadn't read the article and felt a little lost.
In other classes I have edited my classmates papers and think it works really well because it gives you a chance to learn from others mistakes, see their strengths and correct your own.
I am looking forward to writing the performance article because it is unlike any article I have ever written. I am glad we are practicing in class because as we talked about, it can probably be a little awkward to watch someone and hope they don't notice. I am looking forward to trying it out.